First kiss. Not an original idea, but maybe an original story. Ah, I hope you all enjoy the cuteness of this. Particularly you Gin. I realize I made a mistake with my first story about Kotone. Perhaps this one will work better for you?
Thanks everyone. C&C appreciated. Please tear it apart or point out portions that are good or totally suck. :)
-
Alex, Kotone and Lisa are sitting in a circle.
Around them lay all the stuffed animals that both Alex and Kotone own.
Lisa has her single stuffed animal. One that she just recently retrieved from her closet. Raccoon-San.
Alex holds up Lancelot, gDo you know the way to the secret cave?h
gNo,h Kon-Chan replies.
Raccoon-San says, gI know the way!h
gWhere is it?h
gIs over the Snow Mountain. Through the big pass and beyond the spider forest.h
gThat sounds dangerous!h Kon-Chan says.
All nod their heads.
gWhat should we do? I am afraid of spiders.h
Raccoon-San replies, gIf we get the Water-Queenfs kiss, then we will all be safe.h
gSafe of the spiders?h Lancelot asks.
gYes!h
Alex presents Lancelot as being very brave. gLets go!h He says.
He wears a big and bright smile.
They cross the Snow Mountain. They must huddle together for warmth on their first night in the dark pass. The full moon lights their way and the light against the snow has a ghostly appearance for the three. They huddle around the small fire that Kon-Chan lit.
The next day they look for the Sacred Water Falls.
After much wandering through the green forest and some adventures, they find the Sacred Falls.
It is a very peaceful place.
The sound of the water puts them at ease.
Then they see, in the center of the falls, a young woman. She looks mysteriously like Laika.
(Lisa blushes when she adds this.)
gWhat do you want?h The Water-Queen asks. Her voice is stern. Her voice is almost mean.
They all cover in fear of her majesty. She stands atop some rocks and looks down at them all.
gWe came...h Kon-Chan says and stops.
Lisa, as Raccoon-San tries, gWe came for a kiss.h
gTo be protected from the evil spiders!h Lancelot adds.
gAh,h says the queen. Her voice is now calm and loving. gCome here and I will kiss each of you so you can continue your adventure.h
They enter the water and the tiny fish swim around their feet.
gThey are tickling me,h Kon-Chan says.
gHeheh.h
gI like fish.h
The Water-Queen grants them each a kiss.
She pats Kon-Chan on the head. gYou must be brave,h The Water-Queen says to Kon-Chan. gVictory depends on you.h
Kon-Chan smiles weakly at her words. He is unsure of himself. gWhat do you mean?h
The Water-Queen only smiles in return.
gYou must go through the dark spider forest. At the far end is the secret cave,h the Water-Queen says. gDo not waver. And if you have doubt, trust the fox. For they know the truth of their hearts.h
Lisa blushes as she hears these words.
Kotone lowers Kon-Chan as she says this for him. She smiles at Lisa.
Lancelot leaps into the air. gWe will not fail!h Lancelot is very brave.
gGood,h the Water-Queen says. gGo. You will all be victorious!h
The three set out into the dangerous spider forest. The spiders are all there. Ready to bite them and wrap them up in their thick webs.
But because of the Water-Queenfs kiss the spiders cannot touch the travelers.
Lancelot hugs Kon-Chan and Raccoon-San hugs them both.
The Spider-King descends from a tree.
(He looks amazingly like Onii-Chan)
Lisa blushes again.
gYou should not tease Onii-Chan so much,h Kotone says. Her face blushes.
Lisa turns away. gHe deserves it.h
gHey?h Alex asks confused. gWhat are we going to do?h Lancelot questions.
gWe will confront him!h Raccoon-San says. gWe will defeat him!h
gI donft know?h Kon-Chan says. gMaybe he just needs love?h
gNo!h Raccoon-San says. gHow can you love a spider?h
gBut the Water-Queen said to trust the fox?h Lancelot asks.
Lisafs face frowns.
gOh, I forgot,h Raccoon-San replies.
gCome Mr. Spider-King. Why are you so angry?h
gI am not angry,h the Spider-King replies. gI am just so alone. All who go through my forest leave so quickly. I know I am not pretty. But I am not a bad spider.h
gNot a bad spider?h Raccoon asks. gYou are a bad spider! You hurt young girls!h
gNo, no. You misunderstand. I only want to help people.h The king says.
gOnly help people?h Raccoon-San asks.
The Spider-King replies, gYes.h
Lancelot stands forward. gWe thank you, Spider-King. Can you tell us the way to the Secret Cave?h
gOf course,h he replies. gIt is past that Great Oak. The scary one with the large thick branches. Your path is through the big roots. Let my daughter lead the way. Her name is Charlotte.h
gAh, thank you so much Spider-King,h Kon-Chan replies. gWe really needed your help.h
gOh, it was nothing,h The Spider-King replies. gI like helping people. Too many are afraid of me.h
Charlotte steps forward. Her eight eyes sparkle in the dim light. gHi. How are you?h
Lisa stands up. She frowns. Lisa clenches her fist at her side. She eyes the door to the room.
gWhat is wrong?h Alex asks.
Kotonefs face is equally pleading. gWhat is wrong Lisa?h She asks.
gI donft want to play anymore,h Lisa answers. She begins to leave the room.
gLisa,h Kotone says. gPlease do not leave. It is very nice for you to stay. We need you. How will we all get home without you?h
Lisa stops and she blushes. gIc I am not sure I want to play anymore.h
gOh come on Lisa,h Alex shouts. gWe need you! You must lead the way home.h
gYes we need you. Who will be Raccoon-San?h
Lisa turns. Her face is very concerned, she loves her friends, but the story goes against her.
Lisa looks down at the two of them and sneers at Alexfs spider stuffed animal. gOk, but I donft want that thing coming near me!h
Alex laughs out loud. He tosses the spider doll over his shoulders. gShe is gone,h Alex says.
gLets go,h Lancelot yells. gWe are on our way to the secret cave! We do not need Charlotte!h
gOk,h Raccoon-San replies. gLets go. Come on Kon-Chan!h
Kon-Chan is slightly confused. He shakes his head, smiles and follows them.
Kotone thinks to herself. Why does Lisa hate my brother so?
Charlotte sits on the windowsill where she has landed. Her eyes are lit with the roomfs light. She smiles at the three. She does not mind being cast out.
-
I am sorry all. I donft know enough Japanese to think of a better name than Raccoon-San. If someone would like to add a better name, please do. I only took one semester of Japanese in college and Ifm afraid I did not do very well. Now if you want to speak German? That I can do. Lates ?J.
Ich bin Baka! Heheheh.
Oh, I hope you like this one Gin. :) Bye all!!!
Tsunami Channel is hosted on Keenspace, a free webhosting and site automation service for webcomics.